June 27th, 2011

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I have a 'casual/informal' interview at a restaurant today.
I am totally over analyzing this.
Is this appropriate wear for this sort of interview?
Tell me, please?

Got a new poem (by myself, I keep having to reiterate this) up on my poetry blog

Pounding the pavement.
An out of body experience.
Feeling like a higher being is controlling your legs.
Joints rotating.
Legs forced forward.
Mechanically moving.
How does one know that your body is organic?
That blood flows beneath the skin.
That muscles contract under flesh.
Not oil flowing through pipes, fueling the machine within.
Not cogs and gears rotating.
Open up your skin and show the red oil circulating.
Remember the choreographed and practiced gestures stored in your memory.
A wave of the hand.
A nod of the head.
Monotonous and machine driven conversation.
An exchange of meaningless words.
'How are you?', an apathetic gesture, with no care behind it.
Automated and emotionless.

Grit your teeth and smile.
The robotic casing around you, shows the world you are human.
Yet the cogs and gears inside, analyze the truth.

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  • Diceman

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    Honestly? No clue. I'd say yes because it's simple.

    I only really enjoy poems that make sense. So this one isn't too bad. Even if it doesn't rhyme >.>

    June 27th, 2011

  • Kyatic

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    I'd say yes :) If that dress is from H+M, then I'm wearing it right now but in a different pattern. If it's not... then I'm not.

    I like that poem :D All I would say is that the last two lines don't need the commas, but I suppose that's stylistics. I love 'the muscles contract under flesh' and 'machine driven conversation' :)

    June 27th, 2011

  • JoyAndIceCream

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    @Diceman
    The interview went well so I guess it was ok.
    Not all poems are meant to rhyme. Rhyming doesnt make poetry.
    But thank you. By the way, major stealth for drinking tea out of a pint glass. Might take a leaf from your book.

    @Kyatic
    Yes it is H&M. I love it.
    Thank you ever so much. That means a lot. Might take away commas. I used them for a pause but think it sounds better without when I read it aloud.

    June 27th, 2011

  • Diceman

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    Poems for me are meant to rhyme, or they seem like poorly structured short stories at best. But then I'm not an English Lit. kinda guy.
    You should. You'll need to work out how much sugar you enjoy though. I got bored and measured. 80grams :)

    June 27th, 2011

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